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06:19 am - Paragraphs-at-a-Time Story, "The Branch," #4
A little more story for our Friday! Onward through the forest!

Last entry ended with Her eyes were still burning.
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Even after three years, the wildfire boundary just beyond her property was still charcoaled in the trunks of the few remaining old trees, green-lined in new growth.

She and Tim had been living here together then. They'd run through the soaring flames to the Branch, called on it, saved what they could. It hadn't been quite enough. The fire had taken a quarter of the town.

She glanced at him, pacing silently at his side. It had always been a little annoying, the way he eased through the forest, workboots making no noise on the rocks. Just part of his damn magic, of course.

God, he looked good. Needed a haircut, but he always did. Hungry-lean, even though he ate everything going; muscles rippling lightly underneath his flannel shirt and jeans, just like... No. She wasn't going to think of it until she had to.

She closed her aching eyes, and promptly tripped over a stone.

“Careful,” he said, and put his hand on her back to steady her. His touch had never steadied her, even when he'd loved her.

She stumbled again. The carving knife, slippery as the Branch, twisted in her hand, and she tasted blood and water.

“Careful!” It was a growl this time.

She caught herself and her magic, then looked up.

His yellow-gold eyes gazed at her unblinkingly. “You doing all right, hon?”

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May your day be free of falls! ;-)

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From:paratti
Date:September 4th, 2009 11:36 am (UTC)
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Loving it.
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From:laurawise
Date:September 4th, 2009 02:01 pm (UTC)
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Thank you thank you, L. And a good Friday to you! :-)
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From:freixenet
Date:September 4th, 2009 11:45 am (UTC)
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I like the eyes. Yellow-gold is a good color for magic.
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From:laurawise
Date:September 4th, 2009 02:01 pm (UTC)
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Yes, it is. In many ways. ;-)

And I really do appreciate your reading, F. Happy Friday!
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From:anne_d
Date:September 4th, 2009 12:43 pm (UTC)
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"Yellow-gold eyes", oh, that does sound interesting.

I'm a bit whimpery about wildfires at the moment, but the writing is wonderfully descriptive.
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From:laurawise
Date:September 4th, 2009 02:02 pm (UTC)
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I'm so sorry to bring up bad wildfire thoughts! I offer water, happier thoughts, thanks, and good wishes for your Friday.
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From:anne_d
Date:September 4th, 2009 02:09 pm (UTC)
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No, no, it's cool, I'm just a bit obsessed at the moment. The story is engaging and I can't wait to find out what's next.
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From:laurawise
Date:September 4th, 2009 05:26 pm (UTC)
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You are a kind person. :-) [sends good thoughts]
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From:mamculuna
Date:September 4th, 2009 01:35 pm (UTC)
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Hot guy! And magic, too...keep going!
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From:laurawise
Date:September 4th, 2009 02:03 pm (UTC)
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I'm so glad you think Tim is hot -- I rather think so, too. :-)

Thank you thank you, and all good thoughts for your Friday!
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From:laurawise
Date:September 4th, 2009 05:25 pm (UTC)
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Your comment makes ME very happy. :-)

I wish you NO fails, NO falls today. Happy Friday, Rainkatt!
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From:laurawise
Date:September 4th, 2009 05:24 pm (UTC)
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Thank you so much, L!

Hope your Friday is a good one. :-)
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From:stateless82
Date:September 4th, 2009 05:26 pm (UTC)
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His touch had never steadied her, even when he'd loved her.

Love that line. Also 'green-lined in new growth'
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From:laurawise
Date:September 4th, 2009 05:42 pm (UTC)
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Thank you thank you, S. :-)

Happy Friday, with books and joy and time to breathe!
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From:gwynnega
Date:September 4th, 2009 06:26 pm (UTC)
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His touch had never steadied her, even when he'd loved her.

Great line!
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From:laurawise
Date:September 4th, 2009 07:23 pm (UTC)
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Thank you, Gwynne! (And thank you for reading, despite mention of wildfires.)

Happy Friday to you!
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From:kathyh
Date:September 4th, 2009 10:04 pm (UTC)
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His touch had never steadied her, even when he'd loved her.

That's a fascinating line. This format is really working nicely. Looking forward to more :)
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From:laurawise
Date:September 4th, 2009 10:38 pm (UTC)
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Thank you so very much, K! I'm glad that line pleased, and so happy that you're enjoying the experiment so far. :-)

Happy almost-Saturday!
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From:ladyforash
Date:September 5th, 2009 01:00 am (UTC)
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I'm so behind. I'm sorry! I promise to catch up later.
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From:laurawise
Date:September 5th, 2009 09:53 am (UTC)
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No need to worry about it, C! May it be a happy Saturday for you. :-)

(edited for typo)

Edited at 2009-09-05 09:54 am (UTC)
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From:pinkdormouse
Date:September 6th, 2009 06:59 am (UTC)
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I'm so fascinated by this.
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From:laurawise
Date:September 6th, 2009 10:22 am (UTC)
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Thank you thank you! I smile and send good thoughts for your Sunday. :-)

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